my character

Name: adrian vanderstap
Age: 17
Gender: male
Eyes: dark navy blue
Hair: brown with black highlights and its long
Height: 6"1
Body Type: bigger , muscler
Skin Color: white pail
Place of Birth: Duncan BC
God Parent: Deimos
Mortal Parent: donna vanderstapLikes:
likes: people that defend there friends , noodles :3 , hunting ,swimming , camping ,traveling
Dislikes: self-centered people , bullies :3 , annoying people , cabbage
Pets: a german shepard that he grew up with and is his closest friend . dogs name is shanow (not shadow)
Weapon: two small daggers and a bow . bow is 60 pounds (pulling back)(5 pounds carrying), bow is made of celestial bronze the two dagger are made of celestial bronze
Flaws: his own fear can overwealm him in battle . dark things/people can weaken him cause of there energy. bad at close range attacks
Powers: can tell other peoples fear with just a glare.Can intimidate people by making an illusion of there worest fear a black shadow that changes to be the persons fear twice the size of the person it is targeting to cause intimidation for 5 mins (limt 5 times a day and can be cast from 50 feet away. can be resisted by some one that has a strong will . can cast two illusion ). can feel others emotions . his power is basically able to intimidate people while he kills them from a long range attack
personality: adventurous , loving , charming
personality flaws: single-minded, shy , stubborn,
Life Before CHB: Adrian had a hard life growing as a poor child in Vancouver BC . not knowing who his father was and his mother left him at an early age , adrian attended school but only if it was really important . his passion was a sport called archery and he took it on at an early age . this helped him to get food when he need to leave the town and hunt in the wilderness to survive , he never really had friends but his pet filled that spot of emptyness that lied inside him , he always found the wilderness to be his home , but one day had stumbled upon the camp . the energy from the camp made adrian feel like it was a same haven . he couldn't sense any fear within the camp just strength and friendship . this is what adrian had been looking for his whole life . a place where he could be accepted for once in is life
Any notes about your characters:
- cross him and you cross his friends
- he is scared to lose anyone close to him
- baggy jeans
- ripped shirt
- gets angry when you insult his family
- has a high energy level
- bigboned but has strength
- nicknames "arrow"
- will take time to gain his trust
- a ragged old sweater
- is looking for love of someone else but is hard to open up
- is in to metal/screamo music but never had an ipod or any music player his fav song is ( enemy -disturbed ) it plays in his head when he fights
RP exaple:
as adrian walks out of his cabin his past memories flash in his head causeing extreme pain (flashback)( it was a battle againest some hunters that were after one of is friends (a little bear cub ) him and shanow took a stand with the rest of there pack (a.k.a shanows family) they were victorious but with a cost . half of shanows pack died trying to protect him and adrian and the little bear cub . adrian took this as it were his own family had died . he had lived with the pack for over a year and had made a close bond ) (flashback ends) adrian crys and shanow looks up at him . adrian looks toward him and goes to hug him saying "well at least we have each other right " still sobbing as shanow licks his face . shanow always knew what too do

We don't allow wolves as pets. Also, no talking to animals. A child of Deimos could not do that.
Why is the bow 70 pounds? That's unrealistic. What type of metal are used to make his weapons?
Why is he weakened when animals die? Add two more flaws
Would you mind explaining his power? What does he do with it?

kk updated and could if its ok show me where ill be staying :)

hey is my dog allowed to have armor or something that makes him more unique than a reagular dog , like could he have an ability

Don't double post.

No it will need to be just a normal dog.

What you have for talents would be a power.

So he can know what someone's worst fear is by looking at them. How many times a day can he do this? How many people?
So he makes an illusion of the fear. What's the biggest illusion he could manifest? How long would the illusion last?
And what do you mean by stun? The person is scared of the illusion and are afraid to move? Or he is physically able to paralyze people?

The weapons need to be celestial bronze. And why is the bow 60 pounds? Bows are not that heavy, the usually weigh about 10 pounds at most.

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"- cross him and u cross his freinds " please type out "You" rather than "u"

How far away can the illusions be from Adrian? How many illusions can he create in a day?

Jordan wrote:So he can know what someone's worst fear is by looking at them. How many times a day can he do this? How many people?
And what do you mean by stun? The person is scared of the illusion and are afraid to move? Or he is physically able to paralyze people?

Can you just explain to me why the bow is 60 pounds?

updated the bow is 60 pounds (you know when pulling back a bow there is a certain amount of pounds of restraint on the string ) lifting the bow to carry is about 5 pounds

Add a personality flaw. i.e. Prideful, Arrogant, Vengeful, etc.

Can you just explain to me about the stunning? Is it just the initial shock from the fear? Or does it actually paralyze people?
100 feet is a tad much in my opinion. How many illusions can he make at a time? Can the illusions be resisted?

updated and im sorry this is take so many reveiews

Are there limits to being able to "toy" with someone's fear? What exactly can he do with this?

I would not allow him to stun someone. If that's what happens when they see their fear, then the other rper can choose that, but stunning someone isn't really a Demios power in itself.

then its intimidate and toying is just another way of saying that i can see them and the way i would toy with them would be like to mention to the person be it friend or foe and maybe add to by makeing it manifest its self in a illusion

Elaborate on what you mean by "Intimidate." Does he show them their fears or what?

Then toying with them wouldn't really be part of the power. Seeing the fears would be, though.

Also, your grammar could use some fixing...

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Please don't double-post/bump the topic. We might not even check it if you do.

He cannot see 50 feet away, so he probably can't see the person. Please lower the distance.

The second power is basically his major power so could you please lower how many times he can use it?

How many times can he see a person's fear a day?

Emotions don't really have to do with Deimos.

By intimidate you mean scare?

You do know that you can't kill other people's characters unless they give you permission, right?