Raven Barnes, Daughter of Thanatos

Name: Raven Barnes
Gender: Female
Mortal Parent: Mary Barnes
God Parent: Thanatos
Date of Birth: October 13th, 2000
Place of Birth: Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
Hometown/Last Residence:  Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
Race/ethnicity: 40% French Descent, 40% Italian Descent, 20% Cherokee Native American
Accent: A hint of a southern accent, but mostly a typical, American dialect
Skin Tone: Pale skin that looks even paler than it actually is when compared to her black hair
Eye Color: Light Green
Hair Color: Black
Hair Length: Shoulder length
Height: 5' 4"
Weight: 95 lbs.
Body Type: Thinner than normal, which is barely noticeable underneath her clothing
Appearance:
The most noticeable feature she has is a three clawed scar stretching from her the left side of her forehead down to the corner of her mouth, running just under her left eye. Raven has a rather boyish stature and appearance, to the point that she often has to point out that she's a girl. She has jet black hair that ends just above her shoulders, which she preferably leaves down. Being a daughter of an Underworld God, she has the typical appearance of an Underworld child, with paler skin than normal, and a slightly thin body. She eats large amounts of food to both keep her strength up and to try and help her gain weight. She takes care of her fingernails rather well, keeping them about half an inch long, and always painted black. She has one long scar across her back, beginning from her right shoulder, all the way to her the left side of her lower back.
Clothing:
On most days, Raven can be seen wearing a black t-shirt with a dark blue tribal pattern that stretches from her right sleeve and down her entire right side, ending about an inch from the hem. She wears this with black, faded jeans and a pair of black, white accented sneakers. She'll also wear a thin, charcoal, zippered hoodie. .
Weapon: Stygian Iron Hand-and-a-half sword, with 2 small, 5 inch Celestial Bronze daggers that she keeps hidden in the sleeves of her hoodie.
Armor: Prefers none for extra speed, but has a Celestial Bronze, black painted breastplate and matching horse hair crest helmet.
Pet(s): None
Skills/Talents:  
1. Basic Archery
2. Advanced Sword handling
3. Adept at Parkour
4. Can sing rather well
Flaws:
1. Clumsy (Only outside of a fight, but otherwise practically constant.. Small stuff mostly, like stumbling over nothing, bumping into people, dropping stuff, etc.)
2. Stage Fright  (Has an almost impossible time demonstrating something in front of more than a few people
3. Indecisive
4. Cannot bend her back too much without causing pain
5. Larger than average ears. (Likes to keep them hidden under her hair or her hoodie, though they still stick out of her hair about half an inch)
Strengths:
1. Fast reflexes
2. Relatively strong despite thin appearance
3. Excellent Night Vision (Objects are sharpers and more focused)
Weaknesses:
1. Prefers to do things alone
2. Bad vision in direct sunlight (Far away objects get a little blurry, almost to the point of needing glasses)
3. Gets very weak if she Shadow Travels without eating recently
4. Absentminded due to the voices in her head, unless in a battle
Likes: Shadows | Night time | Music | Reading | Food | Darkness |
Dislikes: Socializing with more than 2 people at a time | Large Crowds | Group Activities | Bullies | Daytime | Sunlight | Bras |
Fears: Fear of drowning which causes a fear of bodies of water that are bigger than a swimming pool | Fear of heights greater than the height of an Oak tree |
Personality: Quiet and distant from anyone she doesn't know well. She prefers to do everything alone. Despite her outward personality, she is very talkative and loyal to her close friends, and will not hesitate to lay her life down for her friends. Raven is pan-sexual, but only lets her closest friends know. She tends to not discuss anything personal with anyone other than friends as well. Raven absolutely hates bras, so she's guaranteed to never wear one. Despite her loner personality and her ferocity in battle, Raven is unexpectedly gentle, and refuses to hurt anyone unless absolutely necessary.
Abilities:
1. Greater eyesight in shadows and at night. (Can see a dim outline of objects and shapes. For example, a tree she could see the outline of the trunk, the branches, and groups of leaves)
2. Can hear voices of the recently deceased within a mile around her and only those that have passed away withing 100 years. Basically a constant buzzing unless she focuses on a certain voice or person. Able to tune out the voice when she concentrates on something, for example, a battle, or training.
Powers:
1. Shadow Travel
    : All distances are limited to one time per post
    : If destination is under 1 mile, then a 3 post cooldown for each use
    :If distance is between 1 and 35 miles, then a 5 post cooldown for each use
    :If distance is between 36 and 60 miles, then a 10 post cooldown for each use
    :If distance is anything between 61 and 80 Miles, then a 15 post cooldown for each use
    :Can send items through shadows no bigger than herself, and no farther than her max          Shadow Travel distance
    :Can Shadow Travel with other people, at most 3 including herself, but the cooldown for each distance is increased by 5 posts per person.
    : With items travelling, anything under 10 lbs. requires only 2 posts to cooldown, and anything above 10 lbs. starts from a 3 post cooldown and adds an extra post with every 20 lbs.
    : Has an easier time Shadow traveling herself or items to locations she has visited often, at least twice a week, reducing the cooldown by a post. (For example, if she were exactly in the middle of New York and Camp Half-blood, it would be easier for her to go to Camp than it would be to go to New York)
2.  Can summon at most 2 skeletons at a time. Each skeleton has a cooldown of 20 posts. Unless destroyed, the skeletons last for 5 posts. If Raven is at full strength, the skeletons can reconstruct themselves once before being destroyed completely.
Social Status: Loner
Summer or Year Rounder: Year Rounder
Years at Camp: None
Life Before Camp:
    Through Raven's entire childhood, she lived with her single mother in a small apartment in Philadelphia. Growing up was difficult with the constant teasing about her ADHD and Dyslexia, like most typical  Demigods. Though she never had a worse grade than a B, her mother was very strict on her. She had constantly insulted Raven over the smallest things, and even beating her when she made the tiniest mistakes. Shortly after her 11th birthday, Raven was fed up with the way her mother treated her, and ran away. She had only been able to pack a few clothes and a little bit of food in her backpack along with a worn, black hoodie that she never went anywhere without.
    After a few weeks of walking around on her own, the monsters finally sniffed her out, cornering her in a small alley in Harrisburg, Pennsylvania, roughly 30 miles away from her home. With three Harpies preventing her from simply running away, the only thing she could do was slip away in a small gap that they couldn't fit in, leaving her completely defenseless as she squeezed through, giving the Harpies a chance to attack. They had caused several gashes down her back and the clawed mark  on her face, all of which have now become scars. After the close shave with the Harpies, Raven knew she had to be more careful from now on. She never stayed in one spot for more than a couple days, and she managed to feed herself by sneaking food away from various picnics and small businesses. Multiple times she had come very close to being caught by cops and sometimes Child services. Her mother never would have cared enough, so she assumed it must have been a teacher at school or something.
    The very second that she had turned thirteen, she began to get this soft buzzing in her ear, almost like too many people talking at once in a room. Not even a full day had passed after her thirteenth birthday before even more monsters showed up. Monsters of all shapes and sizes gave chase to her. Though it was usually the hellhounds and Harpies, but she did spot a couple Stymphalean Birds flying around nearby. Raven, realizing how they never went out of their way to attack humans, began hiding in large crowds and public areas to try and evade them. For months her strategy worked, escaping monsters that seemed to come after her about every other month.. A Cyclops had come a few times, though it was mostly a small group of Harpies or a couple Hellhounds. Day after day, Raven tried to figure out why all these weird things were trying to kill her, but she could never figure out why. Her thoughts ranged from her simply going crazy, all the way up to her being some sort of God. Yet, each idea she had was less believable than the last. With each day that passed, the buzzing in her ear grew stronger, doing a very good job at distracting her from hiding or scavenging. After almost a year of trying to figure out what the buzzing was, she figured out that if she concentrated hard enough, she could focus the buzzing down until it was a voice, though she couldn't figure out who's voice it was. Raven could even focus her mind enough to where the buzzing wasn't as distracting, not getting rid of it completely, but pushing it back so it wasn't as intrusive.
    On a day in December, what seemed to be close to Christmas, Raven had let her guard down as she spotted a few families in their homes, admiring their decorations. A Hellhound, about the size of a rottweiler, had snuck up behind her and managed to slash across her back, creating a long gash from her right shoulder to the left side of her lower side. With nowhere to go, Raven gave a loud scream of frustration, and in her anger, forced an undead skeleton to rise out of a crack in the ground. As the skeleton lunged forward to fight, Raven managed to slip away in the commotion, though very slowly from the wound. With no medicine to clean it, the best she was able to do was to wash the wound and wrap bandages around her entire midsection. Luckily, the gash never got infected, and soon scarred over, which is still visible to this day.  A few months after she turned 15, she had wandered into a city near the border between Pennsylvania and New York and was found by a young Satyr that was stationed at the middle school. Immediately realizing what Raven was, the satyr managed to convince her to accompany him to Camp Half-Blood.
Role-playing Example:
    With one smooth motion, Raven gripped the handle of her Stygian Iron blade and swiftly unsheathed it from her back, creating a slashing arc as she moved it into a defensive stance. She kept most of her body positioned behind her outstretched sword to maximize her defense, making sure to continuously glance around to compensate for her blind spot.
    Raven stood still in the same position for a few moments as she built up a bit of energy in her body, before exploding in a flurry slashes and stabs, causing straw and wood shavings to fly everywhere from the training dummy. With each attack, she twisted and moved her body to get as much strength behind the blade as possible. With a loud, worn out sigh, she finally stopped her onslaught, kneeling down onto one knee and stabbed the point of her blade into the ground, resting her arm on the hilt as she took a moment to catch her breath.
Notes:Her Appearance

Gonna poke my head in here now to tell you Erebus isn't allowed.

Yea Daniel told me lol oh well, I'm happy with Thanatos :)

If your form is finished, you'll need to take out the WIP in the title too, not just putting that it might be finished in the description.

If you want a drachma reward for this, you'll need to add about 70 words (unless those little separator things you added count as words, but probably not). If not, I'll judge this with the regular form's requirements and italicize the detailed form's requirements.

Elaborate more on her race -- she's descended from what tribes (for her Native American heritage) and what countries (for her white heritage)?

Add some more to her appearance that's not about what she typically wears -- maybe what her face looks like, for example.

Flaws:
- Add two more, including a natural cosmetic one.

For some reason you put stuff about her singing voice in her Abilities section?

Powers:
- Rather than smashing all the limits together, could you please make them a list underneath the overall power?
- Are you talking about times per topic when you talk about her shadow-travel limits?
- What's her cool-down between usages of this power?
- I think defining the item thing as "low-level umbrakinesis" is rather redundant since it's just shadow-travel for things other than herself, so you might just want to remove that phrase and list it under the shadow-travel power.
- Hearing voices of the recently deceased would be an ability, not a power, since this wouldn't take much energy to use. Concentrating to tune them out/on a specific one probably might, though.

Everyone has a social status -- even if she's new to camp, what would her social status be when she's integrated in just fine? What was her social status before camp?

LBC:
- So how far from home was Raven by the time the monsters found her?
- What kinds of monsters attacked her? How many were there?

Quick question, Would the picture at the bottom suffice for her appearance if it's included with what i've already written? I'm not so good at describing facial descriptions lol That's why i always find a picture that shows what my characters look like

You would have to describe her face, sorry. You don't necessarily have to be so specific, nor describe just her face -- like, you could describe her body type more here, her hair, how she carries herself, etc.

Alright, recently edited.

.... Wouldn't being Irish count as European?

So does the scar across her face extend over her eye? If so, that's probably going to affect the appearance of the eyeball.

You still need a natural cosmetic flaw, e.g. one she was born with like a lazy eye, buck teeth, strange birthmark on her face, etc. (If it's in the Appearance section you'll need to add it to the Flaws section too.)

The second point of her abilities would be a note that belongs under Powers.

Powers:
- Instead of defining her powers by times per day, please define it by times per topic since time sometimes doesn't flow very neatly/logically within RP.
- You also need to replace the cool-down minutes with number of posts, such as it takes her 3 posts to recover from 1 usage of her power.
- You still need a cooldown for things under the size of her sword.

LBC:
- So how did she survive on the streets alone after she ran away?
- Did nobody come after her? If she was attending public school, someone was sure to notice she wasn't coming around anymore and would get suspicious, call the police, etc.
- How frequent were monster attacks for her? When she turned 13 she would have experienced more, since this would be around the age she was supposed to be claimed.

Lol wow, I didn't have this much trouble on my last two characters XD I'll get right on it Kendall. Well, i've managed to fix everything else, but i'm still having trouble thinking of a cosmetic flaw, a natural one at least.

Be more specific about her European heritage; there are many countries in Europe.

Is she still blind in her left eye?

For her natural cosmetic flaw, it could be something rather normal that she's insecure about. Here's a small list of things you could try that have been approved before:

Spoiler:

Powers:
- You're gonna need to define the range for the first shadow travel level is -- because "within view" varies.
- Also, no to shadow-travelling twice in one post.
- "With travelling herself or others, there's a cooldown of about 5 posts before she can go again" --> Wouldn't this contradict the listed cooldowns for each range?
- Can she take other people with her? If yes, how much will that affect her cooldowns/how far she can go?
- Boost up the cooldown for the small item transport.
- You go from using size as a limiter for the item transport to using weight? How much does her sword weigh?
- What defines "frequent" for the cooldown reduction note?
- How long do the skeletons last if they're not destroyed?
- Do they rebuild themselves if destroyed? If yes, how many times before they're gone for good?

LBC:
- Instead of smashing the LBC into one large text block, please separate this into different paragraphs.
- Besides being suspicious of how the monsters never attacked other people, what else did she suspect? What did she think made them come after her?
- I think once a week for monster attacks is probably too frequent for the child of a minor god, so reduce that.
- What other kinds of monsters tried to attack her?
- If a Cyclops tried to attack you from behind and did successfully sneak up to you... you'd probably be dead. Not alive. Maybe try a smaller hellhound.

Phew, you definitely are hard to please XD I'll get right on fixing it. Oh! By the way, she was born with abnormally pale skin(Underworld child after all :P) But she's not insecure about it. Will that count as the cosmetic flaw?

Meh. Standards change over time.

Most likely not? Unless she's bordering on sickly-looking.

Flaws:
- How clumsy is she?
- How bad is her stage fright?
- How does she typically react when people think she's a boy? (I probably wouldn't regard this as much of a flaw, honestly, since this is a circumstance out of her control. Looking "boyish" isn't necessarily a bad thing.)

Abilities:
- How much better is her eyesight in the dark/nighttime?
- Are the voices she hears from the area around her, or can they be from anywhere?

Powers:
- Up to how many other people can she take with her?

LBC:
- .... Is she still blind in her left eye? You mention it once or twice in her form in other places, so I'm assuming she still is -- but you'd think it would also factor in to her survival on the streets.
- Even if she couldn't name the different types of monsters she faced, you would still have to list them out -- since there are different types that would have easily, easily killed her and would thus be unrealistic to allow most demigods to escape from.

Ok, I added big ears for the cosmetic flaw. And for the boyish, it was under human flaws when I was googling them so i just assumed it was considered a flaw lol. And she's no longer blind, I went ahead and just took that part out. And as for the monsters, I was assuming anything that could really easily kill her wouldn't chase after her since she was an minor God's child. Everything else has been edited.

Flaws:
- Yeah, if she doesn't make a big deal about being mistaken for a boy, it wouldn't be a flaw. Remove it please.
- Is she clumsy constantly?
- For her ears flaw, define "larger than average." (You don't need to give specific measurements, but describe them -- do they stick out more than most people's?)

You didn't answer my question about her eyesight in shadows/at night for her abilities section.

LBC:
- ... Aren't there only two Kerkopes? They're brothers according to the PJO Wiki, and

Spoiler:

- So to clarify: Before turning 13, how frequent were the monster attacks? Or was it just the harpies up until she turned 13?

Oops, sorry about the eyesight. I could've sworn I had edited that. And what would you recommend to replace the Kerkopes? I've been looking everywhere and I can't seem to find a good replacement

Maybe a storm spirit or two? Or empousai.

I put down a few Stymphalean birds, is that ok? Or should I change it to one of your suggestions?

Is there a reason she can't bend her back far without causing pain?

Under the powers, for the skeletons, what considers her being full strength? Surely the mere fact alone she has a cool-down from summoning the skeleton would suggest not at full strength anyway.

For the back pain, it's caused by the injury on her back she sustained in the LBC. As for what her full strength is, I kinda went with a default there and pictured a person at full strength being well rested, full stomach, and bursting with energy. But I can probably think of something else to put if you want me to.

Stymphalian birds are fine.

LBC:
- Unless I missed it in your LBC, you didn't answer my question about how frequent attacks were before she turned 13 or if it had only been the harpy incident?
- Also, how did the weird constant buzzing (from her hearing-the-dead ability) affect her life? Like, did she tell anyone about it, did she think she was going mad, etc? Or did it not show up until later when she was claimed and all?

Other than that your form looks good.

Ok, edited. I didn't quite know what to do about monster attacks between the harpies and her 13th birthday, so I simply put that the monsters had slowly gotten more frequent around, like they were looking for her but couldn't quit pinpoint yet. Is that alright?

If they were close they probably would have noticed her though, since the closer you are = the stronger the scent? Even masked with mortals' scents a demigod's would be more unique, and it ~is~ possible for them to attack before the 13th birthday. It's just much more rare.

And how long did it take for her to manage to get used to/ignore the buzzing?

So should I actually have them attack her? With more attacks, wouldn't her survival chance go down?

Not frequently, but one or two other attacks would be logical if she were close by and they were looking for the source. (You could just say the harpy incident was the only attack, though.)

And yes, that's the point of monsters attacking people. She'd get injured or have to escape but it's not outright impossible for her to survive another one or two attacks.

Ohhh alright. Well, Since it's alright with you, i'll just stick with the Harpy attack. Shall I just edit out the attacks between the Harpy attack and her 13th birthday?