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by Lob The Lobster 12/12/2010, 9:50 amThe Algorithm to Modern Life
Edit: This is outdated. Please find the new beginning.
Edit: This is outdated. Please find the new beginning.
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Last edited by Lob The Lobster on 4/22/2011, 10:18 pm; edited 2 times in total
Lob The Lobster- Dedicated Member
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Age : 26
Registration date : 2010-02-21
EDIT: The following spoiler is for my own personal reference. Please refer to the next post with the story in it
- Spoiler:
- Wake up. Get ready. Drive. Work. Drive. Sleep. This is my average day. At least it used too. Everything used to be perfect. Not as in work, to be honest I was a sellout. But humans were, or whatever they really were. So was everything else. Energy, peace, the planet, everything was right.
But I woke up one morning, and it was gone. Sure, my car was the same, my house was the same. Even my job was the same. But the gloom of the day, it was so much more intense. It wasn’t right.
And while I was sure I wasn’t in a dream, I later turn to find out it’s not. That’s what my journey throughout this all is, regardless of what it may seem to look like throughout this book. So enjoy my story. It may help you recognize the bigger picture, or give you a nice read.
Next, we have Mary. Mary is stuck within a strong bind. She much watch the destruction of everything she loves. The even less unfortunate thing is she must do it herself. Only she does not control it. The prison, makes her.
Mary
Help me. I’m stuck in the prison. The prison is a living hell. It tortures me day in and night. It’s ruthless, looking to pray on those of the weak. That’s how it found me.
But the prison is not physical. I am in not a square cell. I am not trapped in a basement. I am not the murderer girl who was sent away. At least not half of it.
But why would anyone help me? How could anyone help me? Deception would be the only way to convince them, but the prison would find out. It would hurt me more, do more damage then already it has.
Help me, for the prison is my mind.
Lastly, we have Holen. Holen will serve as a leader when he meets our other characters. But do not mistake leadership as important; for I assure you, if this story has any one most important character, it’s certainly not Holen. But read on. His story is surely going to catch some of your attention.
Holen
Do not mistake me. I was never the leader of the pack. I never made the winning plays, the stunning jokes, the bossy decisions, anything.
But no one would attack me. Not even in high school. It was if I was untouchable. But when untouchable, friendship is hardship when trying to achieve it. I only made one friend, and he died an unknown death, presumably a murder. Afterwards, I never tried friendship again. Because becoming attached is a vulnerability, because even the strongest binds can be broken.
That was only a year ago, when I was a junior. And it turns out I’m going to be the leader of a group of some importance.
I’m not ready.
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Kiryuu-Kun- Role Playing Legend
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Its good.. really good. Can't wait to read more (:
Lob The Lobster- Dedicated Member
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Sherlock wrote:Its good.. really good. Can't wait to read more (:
Thanks! I'll probably add more tomorrow.
Jennie- Retired Staff Member <3
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Jennie approves of the idea. The basic summaries are agonizing, though.
Lob The Lobster- Dedicated Member
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LittleVagrantLady wrote:Jennie approves of the idea. The basic summaries are agonizing, though.
I just needed to add them, so you aren't lost like you are when watching Inception.
(I'll add the next section within the hour, maybe. I haven't wrote at all today.)
Chuck- Pokemon
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Very interestingly distant and psychological... I wouldn't write the whole story like this, but you seem to have something going here. Keep it up.
Lob The Lobster- Dedicated Member
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musicngames wrote:Very interestingly distant and psychological... I wouldn't write the whole story like this, but you seem to have something going here. Keep it up.
Thanks. Everyone has their style, and this is mine.
But I'm taking a small break, so I can do some other writing, and get past my writers block for this story.
Lob The Lobster- Dedicated Member
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I'm restarting this story. At least the intro.
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Life works in curious ways. The simplest of actions can cause the largest of affects. And the human mind makes it no better. Our nature makes us belief that there must be a normal. We reject those who cannot be like others, or a non-existent perfect norm. It also makes us explain the unexplainable. Religion is how most of us wrap our head around these questions. We also hate each other. When a crisis emerges, rather than helping, we destroy each other.
Life isn't fair grounds. When someone has to climb up a mountain, someone else gets a golden carriage down. Life isn't set on friendly fire either. Mistakes can be the the causes of largest distress, and they can't always be forgiven. Also, life requires chance to function. If you happen to eat faster than normal, you could be avoiding the car crash that would've killed you. Or vice versa.
As you can see, life may seem both generous and cruel, but in truth, it is neither. Life only gives. Good and bad isn't an element of life, only an idea in our mind to help us comprehend whose views we agree or disagree with. If the wolf is the bad guy for eating a rabbit, why isn't the rabbit the bad guy for eating the sapling? Good and bad works in our mind because we don't like the cruel reality in life, that big thing eats smaller thing, even though we do it all the time.
Throughout this book, you will find several stories of relatively insignificant people intertwine in through lives complicated web and become a part of something larger than what they know of. Most are abandoned shortly, and most are unimportant. But most isn't all, so remember small details. They'll be important.
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Life works in curious ways. The simplest of actions can cause the largest of affects. And the human mind makes it no better. Our nature makes us belief that there must be a normal. We reject those who cannot be like others, or a non-existent perfect norm. It also makes us explain the unexplainable. Religion is how most of us wrap our head around these questions. We also hate each other. When a crisis emerges, rather than helping, we destroy each other.
Life isn't fair grounds. When someone has to climb up a mountain, someone else gets a golden carriage down. Life isn't set on friendly fire either. Mistakes can be the the causes of largest distress, and they can't always be forgiven. Also, life requires chance to function. If you happen to eat faster than normal, you could be avoiding the car crash that would've killed you. Or vice versa.
As you can see, life may seem both generous and cruel, but in truth, it is neither. Life only gives. Good and bad isn't an element of life, only an idea in our mind to help us comprehend whose views we agree or disagree with. If the wolf is the bad guy for eating a rabbit, why isn't the rabbit the bad guy for eating the sapling? Good and bad works in our mind because we don't like the cruel reality in life, that big thing eats smaller thing, even though we do it all the time.
Throughout this book, you will find several stories of relatively insignificant people intertwine in through lives complicated web and become a part of something larger than what they know of. Most are abandoned shortly, and most are unimportant. But most isn't all, so remember small details. They'll be important.
Haiden- Retired Staff Member <3
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I like the intro.
write moar plz.
write moar plz.
Chuck- Pokemon
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Sounds very interesting. A couple small grammatical errors, but otherwise I'm intrigued. Although, I think the last paragraph is unnecessary. Maybe you could rephrase it some other way? Idk. It still sounds cool.
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