Lily Marks [no longer a WIP!]]

Name: Lillian "Lily" Marks
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Eyes: blue
Hair: black
Height: 5'6
Body Type: thin
Skin Color: quite pale
God Parent: Hecate
Mortal Parent: James Marks
Country of Origin: U.K.
Pets: a small, 2 1/2 year old black terrier named Scuff. In her first year of camp, her dad sent Scuff to her as a "first year" present.
Talents: Archery, chess, basketball

Weapon**: an engraved, birch wood bow given to her by her father. She has a collection of 30 cb tipped arrows for it.

Personality: Shy, but funny, warm, kind, and energetic. Has a very close relationship with twin brother Ethan. She is very determined, and does whatever it takes to reach her goal. She is also very focused when she needs to be..

Flaws: Lily can be too hard on herself at times when she has a hard time reaching a goal. In other words, she tries to be "perfect". Also can be too shy sometimes. She can also be a little too opinionated at times, especially with her brother..

Powers(must relate to god parent; optional): has none, which frustrates her immensly

Life Before CHB*:Lily and her twin brother Ethan lived in London, Britain, and went to a private school called Frainswite Academy. They lived with their father, and had a great life. Lily's dad was a lawyer, and their family was pretty wealthy. The Marks family lived in a house with an attic and a basement. Lily had one or two good friends, but wasn't as popular as Ethan. Ethan had a friend who was from the U.S. named Jake, and he acted a little weird sometimes. Frainswite Academy went from 6th grade to 10th grade, and Lily was in 6th grade with Ethan when it happened. One day in school, their language arts teacher, Mr. Clopson, turned into a cyclops and chased them down the street. Eventually, Jake fought the cyclops with a club, and revealed that he was a satyr. Jake took them back to their dad's house to say goodbye, and then the three went on a plane to America. Later, Ethan and Lily were claimed at camp..
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RP Example*: Lily saw Ethan run out of the classroom across the hall. She was in science, dissecting a frog. Suddenly, she stood up fast. "I HAVE TO THROW UP!" she faked, and ran up to Ethan. "What the bloody heck is going on?" she screamed, as she saw the monster pursuing them.:
Any notes about your characters:

Where's the height?

Personality needs to be at least 2 lines long.

For her first flaw... How "hard" does she try exactly? Will she ever get a power or no?

Where did she get her dog? How old is it?

How did Ethan and Lily get to America -- a plane? Boat?

All edited. With the power, I think maybe later, not sure when. And if she ends up getting a power later ill make a detailed form with the power included. But for now, she does not have a power.

Any arrows for her bow?

For the first flaw... I'm not really sure about it. Does she risk her life trying to find it out? Or does she just practice doing things all day, or something.

Edited.

Well I meant that she has too high standards for finding a power and she left herself no room for mistakes.

How many arrows does she possess?

Despite your explanations, I don't see in what way 'trying to hard to find her power' is a flaw, please add another one.

Hmm, how do I explain this...
 Okay, so in her personality it said she was very determined to reach her goals. Sometimes when you get so focused on goals, you can be really hard on yourself, and that can actually DISCOURAGE you from reaching your goal. This is a flaw that Lily has. Edited the arrows, and added another flaw.

I think it would be best if you worded it a bit differently. Is the flaw like perfectionism, maybe? Or is it obsession?

I think you should merge the 'tries hard to find a power' with 'is too hard on herself' because it is basically the same.

How about this?

Approved.