Archer Gilliee

Name: Archer Gillie
Age:17
Gender:Female
Eyes:Brown
Hair:Red
Height:5'6"
Body Type:medium Skinny.
Skin Color: pale
God Parent:Athena
Mortal Parent: Mark forrest. from Scotland.
Country of Origin:USA
Pets:None
Talents: Singing, Swimming
Weapon**: Bow and arrow celestial bronze tips. short sword celestial bronze

Personality:Quiet and Soft spoken, unless irritated. is always willing to step up and help someone who needs help. but also is skeptical of things that she can't understand. did not want to believe that she is a demigod. extremely brave. she would stand up to anything. unless she knew that she could not win. but if she knew that she could win she would not give up. and she loved to play strategy games like chess.

Flaws:overconfident, stubborn, distractible(due to ADHD)Impulsive.

Abilities (must relate to god parent; optional): N/A
Powers (must relate to god parent; optional):N/A

Life Before Camp*: Archer had been bullied for a long time. and after a while she got tired of being pushed around, so she decided to start standing up for herself. so she started fighting back. She began to win fights with the bullies, Because of this she got more and more confident she had been trained in martial arts and self defense and was very good. Eventually one of the bigger bullies zeroed in on her. and no matter how many times she won a fight with him he always came back stronger. eventually she was beginning to believe that she could not beat him one more time. and then a new kid at her school had started telling her that He was a saytr she needed to leave the school or bad things would happen, because this bully was different. this bully was a monster called a cyclops and he would Kill her if he found out she was a demigod . and eventually He Found out . she could not beat him anymore. and he beat her in the next fight. she was hurt badly.She went home and allowed herself to heal and she knew that she could not go back to school. so she left. her dad gave her an address and she knew that her father would not lie to her. when she arrived at the address she found herself at camp half blood. Her father had been told by Athena when Archer was born that his daughter would need to go to this camp eventually to keep her safe. and her father knew that the time had come. Her father was a doctor so he was never home. and when he was home he was working to keep up with everything for his job. so he never had anytime to spend with Archer. so she spent most of her time playing online chess and strategy games.


RP Example*:Archer stood tall in the shadow of the school building. even though she knew that the people she was hiding from would see it as weak she was hiding. she didn't want them to find her, and she didn't want to fight them again. she knew that if she fought them she would get into trouble again. she heard the bullies yelling. and slowly getting closer. Archer shrunk back against the wall. and as the bullies rounded the corner, she turned away from them and ran. she ran. and she had no intent on ever coming back.
Any notes about your characters:

Are the arrow tips and sword Celestial bronze?

Add more to the personality.

Is her distractibility related to the ADHD that's standard for most demigods?

Life Before Camp should be at least 5 complete sentences long. You also need to include how she got to camp.

Name: Archer Gillie
Age:17
Gender:Female
Eyes:Brown
Hair:Red
Height:5'6"
Body Type:medium
Skin Color: pale
God Parent:Athena
Mortal Parent: Mark forrest. from Scotland.
Country of Origin:USA
Pets:None
Talents: Singing, Swimming
Weapon**: Bow and arrow. short sword celestial bronze

Personality:Quiet and Soft spoken, unless irritated. is always willing to  step up and help someone who needs help. but also is skeptical of things that she can't understand. did not want to believe that she is a demigod. extremely brave. she would stand up to anything. unless she knew that she could not win.

Flaws:overconfident, stubborn, distractible(due to ADHD)Impulsive.

Abilities (must relate to god parent; optional): N/A
Powers (must relate to god parent; optional):N/A

Life Before Camp*: Archer had been bullied for  a long time. and after a while she got tired of being pushed around, so she decided to start standing up for herself. so she started fighting back. She began to win fights with the bullies, Because of this she got more and more confident. Eventually one of the bigger bullies zeroed in on her. and no matter how many times she won a fight with him he always came back stronger. eventually she was beginning to believe that she could not beat him one more time. and then a new kid at her school had started telling her that she needed to leave the school or bad things would happen, because this bully was different. this bully was a monster and he would hurt her. and eventually He did. she could not beat him anymore. and he beat her i n the next fight. she was hurt badly. and she knew that she could not go back to  school. so she left. her dad gave her an address and she knew that her father would not lie to  her. when she arrived at the address she found herself at camp half blood. Her father had been told by Athena that his daughter would need to go to this camp eventually to keep her safe. and her father knew that the time had come. Her father was a doctor so he was never home. and when he was home he was working to keep up with everything for his job. so he never had anytime to spend with Archer. so she spent most of her time playing online chess and strategy games.


RP Example*:Archer stood tall in the shadow of the school  building. even though she knew that the people she was hiding from would see it as weak she was hiding. she didn't want them to  find her, and she didn't want to fight them again. she knew that if she fought them she would get into trouble again. she heard the bullies yelling. and slowly getting closer. Archer shrunk back against the wall. and as the bullies rounded the corner, she turned away from them and ran. she ran. and she had no intent on ever coming back.
Any notes about your characters:

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Since ADHD is a standard demigod flaw, you're going to need to add another one to this section.

LBC:
- Please edit this so that the writing style isn't so choppy; half of these parts could be paired together into one sentence per pair.
- What was her life with her dad like, outside of the bullying? Did she not tell him about this?
- So... did no adults know she was being bullied?
- What was this bully, exactly? Was he an actual monster, or just a really big mortal jerk?
- How did her dad know where camp was?

I've edited.

Edit the original post at the start of the topic, not the reposted version please.

"Medium" is rather unspecific for her body type. Is she tall and skinny? Ectomorph/mesomorph?

Also, please specify the arrows are tipped with CB.

Add some more to the personality.

LBC:
- What kind of monster was the bully -- a Cyclops?
- And why didn't the monster kill her when it had the chance? How was she winning? She's not trained in fighting these things.
- Was the new kid at her school a satyr/demigod?
- How badly was she hurt? Did she leave for camp immediately?
- Did Athena tell him about camp when she was born?

I've edited again

Not sure if liking certain games is really a part of personality, unless you mean she's very analytical (which might conflict with her impulsive flaw).

LBC:
- So the bully was a Cyclops -- why was he letting her beat him (since I doubt an untrained demigod could truly beat a monster like that)? Why hadn't she noticed something weird about him before? Monsters don't just repeatedly pick fights with mortals like this.
- How much time did it take for her to recover? If she spends more than a few hours home I'm sure it would have been able to track her down.
- How old was she when she got to camp?
- Did the satyr accompany her on her way to camp? Even with an address it might be a bit hard to just stumble upon it.