new demigod here!

Name: Adrianna Adams (prefers to be called Adri)
Age: 15
Gender: woman
Eyes: hazel
Hair: red
Height: 5'1
Body Type: muscular
Skin Color: white
God Parent: Hermes
Mortal Parent: Margret Adams
Country of Origin: USA
Pets: none
Weapon**: Bronze dagger (that's it. nothing special. just a regular dagger)
skills/Talents: flexible, took gymnastics for 2 years but stopped after a monster had burnt it down
Ability: can speak with snakes
Personality: shy, more of an inside person.  If someone says something bad/mean about the people she loves she will get furious. loves to run (she could beet anyone that challenged her to a race). While she was in the orphanage, she would often sit in her favorite corner and either read or draw.
Flaws: over protective with family and friends ever since her brother died, she will volunteer to do the hard/dangerous stuff so other people wont have to do it.  after seeing Neal's dead body, blood has freaked her out, she is ok with paper cuts, but large amounts of blood makes her nauseous. she lets what other people think about her get to her, if someone says something about her she will try to change.

Before camp:  
Adri and her little brother, Neal, were put up for adoption by birth mother. She always got bullied for having mental break downs because he hated that her mother gave her up and she didn't know why. No one did any thing about the bullying so she and Neal ran away when she was 14 and Neal was 10. Neal was a mastermind when it came to technology, so he hacked into some files and deleted every record, picture and video he could find. Someone ended up going to the police about them missing, but Adri had luckily swiped a few $100 at the orphanage, so they paid a couple of guys to convince everyone they were dead, and it worked. About 2 days later, they were sitting on a park bench when guy with crutches came up to them. His name was Tyler and he said he needed to tell them something. He showed them his satyr legs and told them about the demigod world. He said he could sense they were demigods and needed o get them to camp half-blood if they wanted to live. About 3 days into the journey to camp, they were attacked by a hydra. Neal had died during that accident but Adri managed to get away. Seeing Neal's dead body had scarred her. After the attack Adri was leaning against a rock crying with Tyler by her side. Tyler helped her up and told her they should keep moving. Adri wiped away her tears. She figured being a half-blood was not going to be easy and she had to be strong.

RP example:
"it's not your fault" Adri would say, trying to convince herself. But she knew it was her fault that her brother died. she had told her brother to go hide behind a rock, but has the hydra grew more heads, her brother got worried and came out from behind the rock to check on her...a tear rolled down her cheek. She missed Neal so much. They always agreed with each other and were best of friends.  "no" she thought. "you can not dwell on the past."

Moved to the regular character forms section.

You're missing the Talents/Skills section.

Weapons:
- What is her bow made of?
- What are her arrowheads made of?
- What kind of poison does she have on these arrowheads, and how effective is it?

Her power would be an ability, so please change the name of this section to Abilities.

Add more to the personality -- maybe another 3-4 sentences or such.

Add two more flaws.

LBC:
- Please make sure these are complete sentences, including pronouns and such.
- Add more detail to this section. How well did she and Neal get along? Why did their birth mom put them up for adoption? 
- Was Neal also a child of Hermes, or just a mortal?
- Why did two young kids run away together? They would have gotten caught.
- What did they do after they ran away? 
- When did they get attacked by a hydra? (As in, how old were they?)
- No to Hermes appearing to lead her to camp. That counts as contact with a god, which is not allowed.

updated! (not sure what to add in personality)

For the arrow poison: Completely stun a person for 20 minutes? How much is required to do that?

Skills/Talents:
- ... A furry what burnt down the gymnastics place?

For personality, think of how she acts towards other people and relate it to what she thinks of herself and why/how. For example, why is she aggressive -- and how? 

Flaws:
- How overprotective is she of friends/family?
- How badly does blood freak her out? Does she feel ill (or actually faint) at even small amounts of blood?
- How badly do other people's opinions affect her?

LBC:
- I don't think you answered my question about why the kids were put up for adoption.
- Add a bit more detail about their time at the adoption center (orphanage?). Why was she considered "different"? What did the adults do about the bullying?
- As I said before, it would be difficult for kids that young to run away successfully; someone would find them, or people would get suspicious and call the police to take them in. Please alter this.
- How did the satyr find her?
- No to the letter from Hermes. That still counts as contact with a god before camp.

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Weapon:
- I'm gonna say no to completely paralyzing someone for 20 minutes.
- I'm also going to say no to the unlimited arrows, you'll need a god parent gift to do that.

You still need to add more to the personality.

LBC:
- People are gonna notice when two kids are missing at an orphanage -- that's a pretty good way to get investigated by the police for negligence, which is not recommended.
- Since they're both so young, I don't think their scents would be strong enough to attract much attention from either satyrs or monsters -- so maybe try bumping them up a year or two.
- I'd also prefer if you had your character claimed when she reached camp, not beforehand.

updated!

Heyo!

- Neal is only 10, I doubt he'd be able to remove every info out there. Maybe just those he could find immediately? Also where did he get a computer?

Rest looks ready for approval (:

updated!