my first character

name:Glliono Fabbro
age:13
gender: male
eyes:blue
hair: black
height:5'3
body type:muscular
skin color:white
god parent:Ares
mortal parent:Mindi Fabbro
country of origin:Italy
pet:cat Jasper
talents:fast hand movement which helps him attacks faster, smithing
weapon: celestial bronze short sword named Snake Strike
flaws:He is not good at blocking ,always wants to fight, holds grudges
powers:none
before CHB: mom made him cook and do all the chores, because she was in a wheelchair from a car accident. he did average in school. He liked to practice fight with his friend using sticks as swords. When he turned 13 in 2012 Glliono and his friend were fighting with sticks when a hell hound walked in through the gate. His friend took his arm and ran. He took him to a boat going to New York by car after they barley escaped from the hell hound. He followed his friend, "who was a child of Hermes" ,still not knowing what to do he followed his friend into Camp Half Blood
RP example: I was in my backyard hitting rapidly at my friend who finally said yes to practicing swords with sticks. I let him use the shield i made out of wood. I was the one mostly fighting while he kept his shield around his face. When he finally stroke out at me i barley blocked it with my stick. Then i started to bash his shield again,until he complained that his arm hurt and we went inside.
any notes about you character: sportsy and history lover. He is friendly to almost everybody. Gets nervous around the daughters of Aphrodite. He also hates all giants.

Hi! Uh... Where's the actual form part of the form? Can you put this in so I can see what needs editing?

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Okidoki! Does Gilliono have a surname? His mother, too? Weapon must be celestial bronze metal. How is short swords a talent? Please specify. If he has no powers, just say "none" minus the quotation marks. RP example and Life Before Camp both need to be five sentences. The sentence "friendly to everyone Please try and improve the spelling, grammar and punctuation.

In future, please keep the form with the information.

Thanks in advanced! ^_^

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His friend grew wings? Uh, can you explain this to me? I don't remember searchers having wings. Please change the monster in your life before camp. It's a little far fetched.

Thank you~

edited , thanks

Once again, a lamia is a little too much. I know this because I have a character currently in a quest in which Lamia is in. You need a more lower class monster. Try a dracaenae or a hell hound.

You need to add another flaw. Attacking is a talent? That isn't very specific. Anyone can attack.

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Why does he hate giants?

two different kinds of giants imprisoned Ares/ his father

i got the info from Greekgods.info

OK. I had to look that up. It was not two kinds of giants but two giants. As in, one kind. By the names of Ephialtes and Otus. In future, don't trust a site like that. This site mostly uses theoi (although, I personally just use my mythology dictionary book thing because I see it as more reliable). Although I strongly do not like theoi, I suggest you use that in future, OK?

k thanks. are there any more mistakes?

Approved.