Raven Toronto

Name: Raven Amelia Toronto
Age: 14
Gender: Female
Eyes: She has big hazel "doe eyes" framed by purple glasses.
Hair: She has curly auburn hair that reaches her shoulders. She normally puts it in a braid so she doesn't have to deal with it and puts a beanie on top.
Height: Raven is five foot six.
Body Type: Raven is 119 pounds. She's not muscular, in fact, she's terrible at anything involving sports.
Skin Color: Raven is Caucasian, and her skin is tanned and freckled because she spends so much time outside reading.
God Parent: Demeter
Mortal Parent: James Aaron Toronto  
Country of Origin: Sydney, Australia
Pets: She has a kitten, Sabrina, who was given to her for her fourteenth birthday. Sabrina was a present from her aunt, Victoria. Sabrina was named after Sabrina The Teenage Witch, whom Raven has loved for a long time. Sabrina is an elegant little cat, with white fur and intelligent green eyes. Sabrina follows Raven everywhere.
Talents: Raven is talented at chess.
Weapon**: A short celestial bronze sword.
Personality: She likes to read in the sun and play chess. The fact that, however, she is so smart, tends to make her have a big ego. She does talk about herself a lot. When she meets someone she's not at all shy, in fact, she's been known to talk way too much. Raven is a thinker, when making decisions she relies more on logic than emotion. Sometimes she over thinks things, sometimes she thinks about things so long she misses the opportunity. When Raven starts something, she finishes it, no matter what, and never does a half-job. Raven has a quick temper, she's very easy to anger, and when she does, she uses her fists and words, even though she knows she's going to lose. Due to her great memory, she can hold grudges easily. Raven's very competitive.
Flaws: Raven talks too much, sometimes annoying people. She has a big head, people see her as snobby because she thinks she's superior. Once someone angers Raven, she holds a grudge forever. She won't forgive the other person even if it means saving her own life. Raven is not athletic, horrible at anything involving athletics.
Abilities (must relate to god parent; optional):
Powers (must relate to god parent; optional): She can make plants grow and vines move and grow, like do things like grab on people's feet. Raven is still learning, generally speaking she controls smaller plants, like flowers or fruits. The thickest vine she can grow is three quarters of an inch thick. She can control them for three posts, and she has to rest for five.
Life Before Camp*: Raven's father, James, was Australian born and raised. Like most there, he lived on a ranch and was a farmer. He met Demeter disguised as a gardener named Amelia, and the two hit it off and started dating. After a while, she just left with no explanation, leaving James heartbroken.
A few months later, little Raven was wrapped in a bundle on his doorstep with a note from Demeter. Before he had even read the note, he had decided to keep Raven. She looked so little and hopeless, kind of like he felt. The note was about how Raven was his and she was a goddess, so they couldn't be together. James loved "Amelia" so much that he believed it. He named her Raven, after Amelia's black hair, and he gave her his middle name after Amelia.
Raven had a pretty normal life on the ranch. She excelled in school and spent her days talking to James, whom was wise beyond any other man, in her opinion. James was the kind of nurturing father who was always there no matter what, and Raven loved him for it.
James moved Raven to Brooklyn, New York about two years ago. He told Raven that is was because Australia was no place to raise a child. Even though Australia was dangerous, that wasn't the real reason. He wanted to move her closer to Long Island because he knew she would have to go to Camp Half Blood soon.
Raven and James moved into his little sister, Victoria's house. Vic was twenty three years old and her husband was killed in a car crash, and she was having a bad time. Raven hated it. Not because of Vic (Vic was nice and funny and everything an aunt should be), but the poisonous snakes and spiders in Australia didn't even compare to the venomous mean girls in Brooklyn. She was teased there and often got in trouble for fighting.
Things started to look up when she was around thirteen and met a boy named Jeremy Wood. He was the captain of the chess team and the best player around- until Raven came along. Despite their competitive nature and constant fighting over who was the best, they became best friends. After a while, he told her that he was a satyr and she was a demigod. Jeremy took her to Camp Half-Blood after she said goodbye to her father. She was claimed by Demeter two days after she arrived, and it was a good thing, she hated the Hermes Cabin.
RP Example*: "M-rowr!" Sabrina's piercing shriek woke Raven from her pleasant dream about Channing Tatum. Raven was so shocked, she jumped out of her bed. She scowled at her black kitten. Sabrina enjoyed waking up Raven earlier than she would like. Raven was the kind of person who enjoyed sleeping in. She looked out the window with a sigh. Just as she suspected: the sun hadn't even risen yet.
Raven drowsily slowly put on her jeans and Camp Half-Blood t-shirt. She put her auburn curls in her usual braid and put on her hoodie. Raven scooped up her loud kitten and shuffled outside. All of the other children of Demeter were sleeping soundly, like she wished to be.
Raven pushed her glasses up her nose and sat under a tree. She pulled out her book and started to read.
Any notes about your characters: Her favorite series is the Harry Potter series. Her favorite movie is Tarzan, and her favorite television show is Sabrina The Teenaged Witch. Her favorite comic book is the Archie Comics. She still has an Australian accent.

Hi there.

Your form is well written, and your character appears to be well thought out. I look forward to reading her. However, there are just a few odds and sods we need to work out first.

Can you give me a more detailed description of her control of vines? Can she just move them? Make them do things? Make them grow? How big of vines can she control? How long can she control them(I.e. for how many posts)? And how many posts does it take for her to have enough energy to do it again?

Who is Jeremy Wood and why does he know about Camp Half-Blood? Is he a demigod? Is he a satyr?

Hi, and thanks! I edited.

Heyo!

→ Please put a height in ft/inches or in m/cm :)
→ Being smart isn't a personality trait.
→ Abilities aren't talents. Abilities are stuff she is able to do without needing energy, eg Percy breathing under water or talking to horses
→ Please make the cool down at least two posts more

Rest looks perf to me :) great job!

Hi! I edited again, thanks.

When you edited your powers, you accidentally erased what she could make grow and move. Please add that back, and specify the largest she can make a plant grow, and the largest plant she can control, and we should be good.

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Powers (must relate to god parent; optional): She can make them move, grow, and do things, like grab on to people's feet, though the more moving and stuff they do the more tired she gets. Raven is still learning, generally speaking she controls smaller plants, like flowers or fruits. Raven is still learning, she can't do anything to bigger plants like trees, except make the leaves grow. Nonvascular plants are easier than vascular ones. The tallest plant she can control is a young tree. She can control them for three posts, and she has to rest for five.

State what she can control in the first sentence, do not just state "them".

If she can't do anything big like trees, then she can't do small trees. Give me the thickest vine she can control.

If doing more makes her more tired, then don't have a static set of post limits. Give me a range based on what she's doing, or leave that sentence out.

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